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实例评点雅思写作10大爆款级“见官死”开头

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  雅思写作之难,难在导入上,你从这就已经彻底了暴露了你的整个英语实力。第一印象太重要,太多的烤鸭在动笔之初就走在了劣势翻盘的路上。开头段,开头句基本就能让写作考官对你的写作有了一个预期,你的分数就落入了某个区间。一起来看看小编为大家总结的及其容易被考官内心怒骂的10大开头吧。

  实例评点雅思写作10大爆款级“见官死”开头

  “见官死”开头之一:磨磨唧唧 罗哩罗嗦

  典型失败案例: Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?

  This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……

  修改方案:开门见山 直奔主题

  In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。

  Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information? (雅思真题)

  Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.

  Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection

  Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!

  “见官死”开头之二:中式英文人见人晕

  典型失败案例:Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life

  In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……

  Topic 2- The population problem

  The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

  Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?

  I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……

  Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

  Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”.

  “见官死”开头之三:观点模糊态度暧昧

  典型失败案例: Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

  I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……

  “见官死”开头之四:偏离主题无轨电车

  典型失败案例:Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? (雅思真题)

  I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

  “见官死”开头之五:语法错误惨不忍睹

  典型失败案例:Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished? (雅思真题)

  About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.

  “见官死”开头之六:过分简单没有重点

  典型失败案例:Topic-The importance of environmental protection

  This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!

  “见官死”开头之七:用词不当 表达不准

  典型失败案例:Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

  I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.

  “见官死”开头之八:意思重复原地踏步

  典型失败案例:Topic-Your opinion on DINK families

  My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.

  “见官死”开头之九:中国俗语胡乱翻译

  典型失败案例:Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family?

  I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……

  正确说法:Happiness lies in having many children

  Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?

  We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know, don’t know is don’t know”……

  Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?

  Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……

  Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

  I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.

  “见官死”开头之十: 观点武断 态度强硬

  典型失败案例:Topic1-The importance of confidence

  In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’t have confidence, they all have failed.

  Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem

  I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.

  雅思写作精讲--教育类话题写作语料头脑风暴

  雅思写作教育话题主要考察教育对个人的影响以及对国家社会的影响,但因前者居多,在写作过程中我们需以学生作为重点分析对象,当考察某种教育活动或者教学方法时,往往要关注四项发展和三大影响源。

  雅思写作教育话题--四项发展:

  身体(physical development)

  智力(intellectual development)

  道德及思想(mental development)

  社会性发展(social development)

  而它们主要来自三个影响源,即家庭、学校、社会(媒体)。

  四大发展

  身体健康:孩子们户外活动相对较少(insufficient outdoor activities),并且花很多时间在电脑、电视、游戏等,因此会伤害视力(impair eyesight),导致身体素质下降(lead to poor fitness),甚至引起超重(overweight)。学习压力也会影响身体健康(often spend much time on study/face fiercecompetition so that they suffer from great study pressure).

  智力发展:在校学习学术知识(academic knowledge),从电视或其他途径中了解课外知识(extra-curriculum knowledge that students are interested in),学生们可以扩宽视野(expand vision)和丰富知识(enrich knowledge)。不同科目会训练不同技能,例如数学-train logic thinking,艺术-relaxfrom pressure, discover talents and develop potential,体育-build better physical condition,learn team spirit, 语言-learn more cultures, more competitive when looking for a job, easierto adapt to the globalized world.

  道德及思想发展:遵守规则(obey school rules, learn basic code of conduct),判断是非(judgeright and wrong),尊重并体谅他人(respect others and be considerate). 培养独立性和克服困难(develop independence and overcome difficulties on their own). 但学生易受外界不良影响(bevulnerable to the negative influence in TV or on the Internet),易模仿行为(tend to imitateparents' and teachers'behavior),缺乏自控(lack self-control ability)

  社会性发展:校园活动(campus activities)和社区服务(community service)可以帮助积累实践经验(accumulate practical experience to better adapt to society), 培养沟通技能(communicationskill/interpersonal skills),解决问题的能力(the ability to solve problems),实习或兼职工作帮助了解工作环境(attend internships or take part-time job to better understand real workingenvironment),认识朋友(make more friends, gain more personal resources)

  雅思写作教育话题--三大影响源

  家庭方面:父母对孩子的性格养成起关键作用(play a key role in building the character);提供更丰富的经历(博物馆或旅游);更注重综合发展(overall development)。但很多孩子为独生子女(only child),家长忙于工作(be busy with work)并且没有正确的教育方法(right parenting)可能会溺爱(spoil)或伤害孩子自尊(damage children's self-esteem)

  学校方面:主要教授知识,教师拥有专业的背景(professional knowledge)和丰富的经验(richexperience),传授知识更有效(more effective in imparting knowledge)。对学生错误行为及时发现和处理(discover and deal with poor behaviors such as bully immediately)。校园活动和体育锻炼可以培养学生之间的合作竞争(competition & cooperation),促使增强实践能力(improve practicalskills),鼓励学生创新(encourage students to be creative),激发好奇心和学习兴趣(inspirecuriosity)

  社会方面:以消极方面居多,主要指媒体中出现的问题内容(questionable content)如暴力(violence)黄色(pornography),青少年容易模仿(copy, imitate),此外青少年不成熟(immature)未形成完整价值体系(value system)也容易被他人影响。

  以上即为对雅思写作教育类题目的思路汇总和语料,我们若能把握这四大发展和三大影响源便可更加自信地应对不同的雅思写作题目。

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